I froze, staring at the lead winged creature with cold fear. I hadn't seen Andrew in almost two years, and I had began to hope I would never have to see him again. But here he was.
Andrew smiled, his pure white wings folded neatly behind his bronze shoulders. If I had to give him a nationality, I would say he was Hispanic, but I knew he wasn't born in Spain. He was born in a lab.
"Long time no see. I see you took no time in finding yourself a new boyfriend..." Andrew drifted off, glancing over to Rory. Rory's entire body was tense, ready to fight. I only wished I could be that confident... but then again, if Rory knew just how fast Andrew could kill, he wouldn't be nearly as brave.
"What are you doing here? Why are you in my house?" Rory was standing, spitting words at Andrew in fury. That's what I like about Andrew- you can always trust him to defend you. Even if there's no way he can save you.
"You may as well ask Katherine... she knows me quite well. I would even venture to say that we were once friends..." Andrew stepped forward and cupped my chin in his hand. "The best of friends."
Before I could turn away, Rory's fist shot straight into Andrew's cheekbone. Andrew's body didn't move... his head merely shot sideways from the blow. Andrew cracked his neck, smiling. "Nice. But I can do better."
At a speed to fast for my human eyes to register, Rory was pressed against the wall, his arms bent up at painful angles behind his back. Andrew smiled. "Told you."
I glared at Andrew, who gave me a look that made it obvious he was showing off. "What do you want?"
"As if you don't already know. I want what I've always wanted- for you to come with us and join the boss."
"As if you don't already know. I'm not going to."
"This isn't like last time. I'm killing the humans now."
"That's against the rules, and you know it!"
"Not if you cover up the deaths by blaming someone else. I kill them, frame someone else, and nobody wonders about mutants."
I froze, horrified at what he had just said. It wasn't the fact that he was planning to kill my friends, or to destroy my life. I knew he wanted to do that. But the simplicity of his plan... now any human that stood in his way was as good as dead. Because the rules were changed.
"So... join us, or watch your friends die. Your choice."
"What is he talking about?" Rory's voice was now tinged with fear. "Join him in what? Who..." He gasped as Andrew pushed his arm up farther.
"One question at a time. Sadly, we aren't allowed to answer any of them... so I suppose you'll just have to keep you mouth shut."
I was trembling now, knowing that he was right. We all had microchips in our bodies... to remove them would be suicide. The microchips exploded if we told lies... somehow the sensed our blood pressure or something.
"So, what'll it be?" Andrew smiled at me. "You didn't think you could hide forever, did you?"
I swallowed. Not again... please let there be some way... "Can't we reach an agreement? What if..."
"No. I promise you, if you don't say that you'll come with us in the next minute, then you three friends here will die."
I clenched my fists tightly, repeating the same sentence over and over in my head. I will not give in. I will not give in. I stared hard at the ground, concentrating.
"You know Kate, it doesn't have to be this painful. Just join us. Join me."
I ignored Andrew. I will not give in.
"It wouldn't be like before..." He was using his other voice now, the voice he had used back when we were only sixteen. It was soft, careful, filled with pain, "We'd be partners with the boss now. We're equal now. Please.... I don't want to hurt you any more. The things I did before were just to keep you safe... the boss made me do them. I didn't want him to kill you... I'm sorry."
"Sorry!" I was crying now. "You killed them all Andrew. ALL OF THEM!" I was looking up at his face now, yelling. "If you were sorry you wouldn't be chasing me! If you were sorry you wouldn't listen to him! You say you're sorry... but just like when you say you love me, it isn't true."
Andrew glared at me. "How dare you accuse me of not loving you." His new voice was back. "And as for the other accusations, I have no choice. You know that. Don't yell at me for things I can't change."
"You of all people know..."
"Did it ever occur to you that I did everything to protect you? Did it ever occur to you that if I had a choice, I wouldn't be doing this?" Andrew shouted. "But I don't have a choice!"
There was a flash of red, and Rory was on the ground, dead. "Your minute is up. I'm not going to challenge you, because we both know you'll win." Andrew smiled. "But if I were you, I would get out of here soon. You know how we framed someone for the murders? That someone was you." Andrew smiled and walked up the stairs, followed by his mutant friends.
I closed my eyes, not wanting to see the three bodies on the ground. I then swallowed. Looking straight ahead, I climbed the stairs. I walked out the front door, then began to jog, then run, then sprint. I needed to get out of here.
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First of all, I want to say that I will always tell the complete truth when commenting on writing. I will not try to make it less harsh and I will not say something is good when it isn't. So, for this chapter I have a lot of things that I think could be fixed. Since I don't know where you're going with the story, it's kind of hard to comment on somethings. These are only relevant if this is the actual beginning of the story. Like if the first two chapters were like a preview of the middle or something then it would be different. Okay, so basically, if I picked up the book and started reading it, the first thing in my mind would be "Wow. She managed to kill off the main character's boyfriend in the first 20 pages. That's great. So now we get to mourn for someone we didn't even know." So I think you need to spend some more time developing the three guy characters. Especially since it seemed like there were going to be around for a while judging by what was in the first chapter. Also, the main character basically showed no sadness at all when Rory or whatever his name is was killed. If she really liked him, then she wouldn't have just been like "Well, nasty winged thing here. I'm going to run now." I can talk to you more in Music Theory tomorrow if you want. It's hard to type everything in a comment.
Well I can can explain... this is actually the beginning of the third book in the series. (none of which have been written yet) Starting from book one would be really annoying, because nothing exciting happens in it and basically the first two books just introduce the main character. Yea... the three guy characters aren't developed much because quite frankly- they don't matter. You just have to know that they're good friends with the main character. Because all of the relationships and feelings are messed up right now, just wait- the third chapter is pretty much an overview of the first and second book, so you'll understand everything then. For now, just be confused. :)
I'm not really confused. I just don't think the personalities are developed enough. But that makes sense if it's the third book. And once again, I don't know how important they are to the story and stuff so it's hard to tell how much something should be developed.
Can you pleeease change Rory's name? It really bothers me for some reason. And yea, I was kind of confuzzled too, but the whole third book thing helps out.
Okay, you pick five names, and I'll choose one to switch out Rory's name with. :)
Yay! Okay. . . .hmmmm, well I'd have to know more of what he's like to do that. Like I'd need a character profile or something. Poo.
How come you don't have a "follow this blog" button like soluna?
And why isn't my names post showing up? *sob*
I think it had:
Philip
Tom or Thomas
Prince Caspian (Just kidding, even though he's really hot!)
Ben
Matt or Matthew (but that sounds kinda old)
Jack (but then you'd have to change the other character's name)
Hmmmm, I had one more. . . I think it might have been: Will. No, no, it was Cedric. No, it was Eric. Yes, that was it.
Bonniiiiiiiii, its been almost a month since you posted!
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