Sunday, August 24, 2008

First Chapter

I was sitting on my boyfriend's couch, laying with my head on his shoulder as we watched some dumb superhero movie, which I wasn't paying attention to. I was facing the TV, but I really wasn't watching the movie- Jack was much more interesting.
Jack was sitting on the ground, a fistful of popcorn in one hand and a can of coke in the other. I watched as he tried to shovel in popcorn and drink at the same time. Shove, slurp, shove shove shove, slurp, cough...
"Jack! You just spit popcorn all over my building!" Kyle, who was also sitting on the ground, pulled the sleeve of his sweatshirt up and rubbed off all of the spit and soda from his lego building. Seeing as Kyle is eighteen, you're probably thinking that legos are under him, but you don't know Kyle. Kyle is like a child prodigy- he was the type of kid who designed buildings for the Olympics. Jack was also looking at Kyle's building.
"Hey, can I help you?"
"No way dude, you'd ruin it. Here," Kyle picked up a handful of blocks and pushed them towards Jack, "You can build with these."
"No way!" Jack stood and leaped over the building, landing in the pile of big legos. But he never quite cleared the building.
"JACK!"
The building toppled over into the big pile of legos, little bricks flying everywhere. "I'm going to kill you!" Kyle tackled Jack into the pile of legos, and the two began to wrestle. I looked up to see if my boyfriend was going to join in just for the heck of it, but apparently Rory was the only person actually watching the movie.
I sighed, comparing his dark tan to my pale skin. We were in perfect contrast to each other- where he had full blond hair I had limp black, where he had vibrant green eyes I had deep black. I studied his face, which is one of my favorite things to do, and saw that it was tense. He must be really into the movie.
"What's happening in the movie?" I said.
"Hm? Oh, the superhero is trying to stop the villain from destroying the world, but he has to do it without his superpowers."
"Why?"
"He gave them up to save his girlfriend."
"Oh." I groaned inwardly. As I watched the superhero sprint across the screen, I wondered if there was something seriously wrong with him. He gave up saving the world to save his girlfriends life? Um, I'm sorry, but last time I checked, destroying the world included destroying his girlfriend. So the superhero gave up his superpowers to save his girlfriend, but now he might not be strong enough to save the world. Wow. Take about skewed priorities. His girlfriend over the world? That's like saying, "Hey, villain person, don't kill my girlfriend yet, wait about five minutes so that you can kill her when you destroy the world."
But as I watched the guy in spandex jump across the screen, I knew he was going to save the world anyway. Because that was the way these movies worked. And that is why I hate hero movies so much- it's not the spandex or the cheap plots... it's the dumb predictable happily ever after ending.
As I watched the movie, I saw the superhero come to this omniscient building. That must be the villan's lair. I looked for Jack and Kyle. This was the only reason we were watching this movie... the villain and the hero were suppose to have an epic fight scene at the end.
"Kyle! Jack!" They ignored me. "Guys! Get over here!" Jack and Kyle still ignored me, which was odd. Suddenly, a cold fear swept through me. Even odder still was that they had been quiet. They were never quiet. Turning my head, I saw five angelic creatures with deep gray wings, two of whom were holding my friends hostage. My friends stared over the foreign hands covering their mouths, their eyes murky with fear. One of the creatures smiled at me, "Hello Katherine."

1 comment:

Thalib said...

Ha, found it. Ver nice. :) I know this is the final, but just one thing, sorry.

The last sentence. Lots of authors do this, but can you really smile, "Hello, Katherine"? They're words. You can say them, shout them, whisper them, but I don't think you can smile them.

What about "...smiled and said, 'Hello, Katherine'"?

Great jorb, though.